An unkindness of ravens

by Sarah   Feb 28, 2008


Confused and lost he is
she said wait, he said it's too late
you said no...but I asked you to wait
I am sorry it's too late

A love so great it lived for so long
beyond the shadow of a doubt
beyond the rain that fills the ground
eyes so blue and wide
spirits soaring up high
flying with the ravens in the sky
promising a love that will never die

I said I love
you said lets wait
I am so sorry it's too late

four years have come and gone
without a sign
without a raven in the sky
I've waited for you
though you never asked me to
our love will survive
I know it will
so if you think it's too late
I ask you to think twice
for our love is so strong yet too sweet and kind

And if letting go is what you want
then I'll sacrifice my happiness this once
sacrifice is the hardest thing in love
and if losing you is the price
then I'll pay it with my life
fly away my raven
fly up high
fly and remember me
remember the love we shared
and when it's time for you to come home
know that I'll be waiting for you...
right here where you belong...

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  • 16 years ago

    by Krista

    I said I love
    you said lets wait
    I am so sorry it's too late

    That was my favorite line.
    Very well written.
    Congrats on winning my little contest!
    Enter my new one, please.

  • 16 years ago

    by trippetta TC

    Love it the mythology of the raven as magic, lost is flawless

  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    May your raven come today. I enjoyed it but do agree the ryhming may need to be adjusted a bit. I like it though. peace

  • 16 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    A very sad, yet heartwarming write. I'm reminded of an Old adage, "Eat more chicken, less crow." I thought this was a beautiful Poem. Peace and Blessings

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Rhyming isn't always necessary, rhymes often ruin the atmosphere of the poem, and in this one I think that rhyming was quite forced which left a negative impression on me.
    Other than that very nice poem, some parts posses amount of originality and idea for whole piece is very creative. I like ending, I think that your writing would be even more powerful with some unique, more interesting, wording.
    All in all good job, keep writing.