My Bravest Man No Longer Alive

by Lemma   Feb 29, 2008


I cannot seem to comprehend
What your life must have been
After all of those terrible things you'd heard
And all of those things you had seen.

I wish I knew what you'd been through,
Before you passed away.
I guess it's all too late now,
And a little too cliche.

But granddad if you're watching,
And you hear these words I write.
I'm full of pride to know that you,
Were brave enough to fight.

Words cannot begin to say
How much I miss you now,
But I believe that you're still here
Someway and somehow.

It's thanks to men just like you,
That today I can be free.
If you had not put your life on the line,
I probably wouldn't even be me.

Everybody has their own
Bravest man no longer alive.
Great granddad I love you
And I'm proud to say you're mine.

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  • 16 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    Stanza #1 line 3 if i'm not mistaken there should be "things" between "terrible" and "you'd" but other than that nice flow great rhyming (sp) and again nothing seems forced, you're very tallented by means of flow and rhyme (i've not read much of your work so i'm sure there are more things you're tallented at) keep up the great writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    "After all of those terrible you'd heard"
    'things' is missing maybe? Hmm.. threw me off a little.

    "I'm full of pride to know that you,
    Were brave enough to fight."
    I think "I'm proud to know that you" would have worked a lot better.

    The poem was good. The rhyme scheme seemed to work well. There were times it didn't seem to flow well, but the meaningful way you wrote was good. The title was ok.
    I thought "Alive" should be replaced with "Lives" for the title at least. The verse in the poem worked well.

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Great poem, I liked the easy flowing lines you used, it made the poem relaxing and easy to read. The ending was nice but I hought it could have been a little more creative. Good job though. 5/5

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