One-Night Stand Again [Song]

by Wasted Fake Smiles   Mar 1, 2008


She sees him across the room, can't help but smile.
She goes over and talks to him...he seems nice.
They have so much in common, they meet up again,
Things go too far, now he's gone like the wind...

She was a one-night stand again,
It's too late to start over again.
She's lost another interest tonight,
Apparently it was lust at first sight.
But she thought it'd be different this time,
But she was wrong.

They had so much to talk about that night,
Seemed everything was finally going right.
But now she's crying and sitting alone,
What was she thinking doing this again?

She was a one-night stand again
It's too late to start over again
She's got no one to hold her tonight,
Apparently it was lust at first sight
She's thought he was different,
But...she was wrong.

So all you ladies out there
I want you to all be aware.
Be careful what you do,
Or you'll end up like her too.
Don't make the same mistake,
Be sure the feelings aren't fake.
Before it's too late...

Oh...
She was a one-night stand again
It's too late...it's over again.
She's got no one to hold her tonight.
And she gives up on life's fight.
As she drives off a cliff...
She was a one-night stand again.
Now her life was taken by him.
Should've known better by now.
But...she was wrong.

~*Who Cares?*~
i hope this was ok to put here, even though it was a suggestive like...title? i didnt use any bad language or anything. anyway, partially true for me...i didnt jump off a cliff though. obviously.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Dutch

    Lovely.xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    I think Ann Marie was so very right in her comment ... this could turn out to be a great song.
    You have woven the thoughts and heartbreak feelings of so many women who have walked this path.

    She sees him across the room, can't help but smile.
    She goes over and talks to him...he seems nice.
    They have so much in common, they meet up again,
    Things go too far, now he's gone like the wind...
    ^^^
    When I first read this part I actually finished your second line in my head like this.

    She sees him across the room, can't help but smile.
    She goes over and talks to him... and sits for awhile.
    It just ran together so perfectly ... and made awesome lines for a love song.

    So all you ladies out there
    I want you to all be aware.
    Be careful what you do,
    Or you'll end up like her too.
    Don't make the same mistake,
    Be sure the feelings aren't fake.
    Before it's too late...
    ^^^
    A wonderful message you've woven with your words here. Once done it can never be undone!

    A great read that I hope reaches out to more readers because it does hold such a great message within and between the lines.
    Great read!
    Luanne

  • 16 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    OK, I really hope you are planning to put this to music! I could almost hear the whine of the guitar as someone (like Michelle Branch or Carrie Underwood) sang it. As a song, I think I'd leave it pretty much as is, but I'm going to go ahead and comment on it as "just a poem", too.

    You did very well at telling your story from beginning to (a very sad) end.

    I would try to limit the pronoun usage (she's he's) and, if they do need to be used, try to work them in somewhere other than the beginning of the sentence.

    For example, your first line coul read:
    Seeing him across the room, she can't help but smile.
    --

    Also, your repeated stanza is a bit wordy. You can easily fix that with just a few word changes in the first three lines:

    Just a one-night stand again,
    Too late to start over again.
    Another lost interest tonight,
    (with no one to hold her tonight)

    If you would like more help on this, feel free to PM me.

    This is a very meaningful poem that will probably touch a lot of people from the girls that let this happen to themselves to the guys that do it to them and don't realize the effect it has.

    Great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Amber

    Wow The ending was kinda a twist but good!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hidden1

    This is very very good. Hell we all make mistakes, some it just takes longer for us to learn from. Don't beat yourself up for it though. Seems to me like you are looking for something, what I don't know. Just take some time and fall in love with you, value, respect, and appreciate you. Then when you are comfortable with you, you can let someone in and let me shine with you. Just take care and be safe. And this has been me before.

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