I loved everything in this poem, the things you used to describe how your feeling were fasinating. My favorite was, "I've got candle wax on my fingers, from tracing your unbreakable heart through your chest." Just lovely! 5/5

That was lovely,i loved the sense of the peom adn the first line you used about a heart seemnig flimsy,that was very different from any other analogy ive ever heard.
keep up the awesome writing!
take care:)

Loved it! The imagery here was flawless and the words you choose to use here just completed everything you wanted to say and the mood you wished to create. I could [feel] what you were saying and I was put into you postion which made everything that much more real for me.

"Cause I'm losing my breath, biting my tongue, and leaping for the chance to escape into a non-existing universe"
^I loved how unique this line was. It just lured me into this fantasy world and tickled me with dreams.

Well done *5/5*

Wow! simply amazing!
great work! 5/5!