A really, really good piece, I thought. It had a lot of emotion, which was just seeping through the lines. I like what was being said, as well as the words and rhymes you were using to say it. Great job.

Brad

P.S. I wonder if you actually thought my poem 'My Sleeping Beauty', was boring, or if you just said that because I said something simular about one of your pieces. Whichever the case, I re-read 'My Sleeping beauty' and I can certainly see what you mean, its not the most dynamic and exciting of pieces, lol.

I like the way you started this off. The flow got off track in the middle though. A cute little piece that many can relate to. A beautiful sentiment of love and never wanting the moment to end.