Comments : Black whole

  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    You mean hole? lol. this is great, actually. leave it as whole. because it's like you've left a wholeness of black...ggreat job.

  • 16 years ago

    by SpEcIaLmE

    That was short but still sad
    just to let u know i think the whole u r refering to is meant to be"hole"
    this poem is good at the length it is but maybe try expanding it to get more emotion and let the reader create a better image in their head
    the flow was good, overall the poem is pretty good
    great job