I really really like this poem good job

So that line just blew me away! It was the perfect line to end your poem! The imager you expressed throughout this piece was just amazing and I could imagine it all clearly in my mind. The third stanza has to be my fave because everything you said just flowed so flawlessly and felt so natural. Great choice of words and overall a wonderful piece. Well done *5/5*

I didn't really like the piece to be honest, but I did like what it was about. I think the reason I didn't like it as a poem was because the lines were too long for the rhymes to be on every other line, for long lines I think it need to be a 'AABB' structure, not 'ABCB'.

Brad

First off: I absolutely loved the meaning behind the poem. It's something that you don't come across too often on here.

"With your tongue in my cheek and my head in your hands,"
- This is definately one of my favorite lines because it's like... reversed. It's not how you'd normally hear it in the world and I love that.
My other favorite line is:
"While you wish I was her, I'm wishing you were him,"
- Amazing. It's a kind of heartbreaking yet bitter piece of poetry to me. I love it. It's probably the best out of the three that I've read from you.
The flow was smooth as always, your vocabulary was wisely chosen, and your emotions were pretty darn strong. Phenominal job, m'dear. :P Overall: 5.5

- Steph. xx