Excellent poem... This poem touch my heart... I like it... Keep up this good work :)

Nice work keep it up

Wow i really liked it. The flow of the poem was great through out the whole of it. You used great words. I can kinda relate to it as well. keep up the great work i dont see anything that needs to change. 5/5

An amazing poem. The flow was flawless and you expressed your emotions so precisely and amazingly. You usage of words and vocabulary were. .simply outstanding. And this piece was just. .intense, deep. Definitely 5/5

Wow. this poem is amazingly beautiful. so sad and touching. the words and the flow feel like.....they fell into place. simply amazing. great job.

This poem was very well-written. It shows lots of emotion... And the flow was good too. I loved your word usage, it helped me to feel the poem and I love feeling a poem while reading it. This definitely deserves a 5/5

I really liked the emotion in it but there are a few mistakes I would like to point out. I'll try not to sound too brutal, lol.

I suggest that if you're not going to give it a rhyme scheme, then you try to use words that don't rhyme or the reader gets a little confused and off balance. In the 4th stanza, second line, I would like to say that "time" should be plural. and last of all, in the 5th stanza you wrote:
"Still hold true within inside me"
but "within" and "inside" mean exactly the same thing so I would pick only one of the two to use.

Now for the good stuff. I love how you touched all of the good times and then basically stated I will always love you but it's over. This poem is easy to understand which is good. You're also good at choosing the right words to convey the message. Overall I give it a 5/5 I just hope you will consider my advice. ^.^

I can relate to this a lot. It's sad and the emotions pour out of the poem as the reader is reading. It's nice that you wrote it in dedication to sometone. :) I'm sorry for your loss. -Amazing poem.

This poem is really good. I liked the bit that says
"You were my first love and my first kiss
There are so many of our special time
I'm going to miss,"
I can feel the pain you are trying to show.
5/5

Great write, I just have one Question. Is he still alive or dead?

I know it's a very blunt question and you don't have to answer it. The poem seem to talk of seperation and at the end you said R.I.P. So I was just curious.

Its good, but I hate when u write poems about him! Te amo!

A great, touching poem. Keep it up. 5/5