Tired of this game
by waiting 4 some1 Mar 5, 2008
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I will keep on writing to ease my pain |
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16 years ago
by Nawa
Wow !!! simply amazing, goes right through the heart.
"And I hate myself even more for failing to hate you
What I have discovered that I can only love you
So should I cut? Should I bleed?
To make you see it's YOU who I need
Should I raise my voice when I cry?
To let you know I am about to die
If this is a battle I already gave up
If this is a game I am already Fed up
And just to let you know the time is up
So I beg you my love please show up."
Amazing !!! -
16 years ago
Aww, i think we can all relate 2 this poem. 5/5
xoxo
~me~ -
16 years ago
by Dark Secrets
Wow!!! I love the ending... nice poem 5/5
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16 years ago
by hopefulsmile
It's a great one , wallah
it's very impressive and touch my heart soooo much coz i really feel what u feel exactely :p
excellent poem -
16 years ago
by Sherry Lynn
The emotions you have vividly portrayed are all to real for anyone that has felt the pain of love in their life.
I wish I could tell you that the pain will go away, but it seems to always hurt a little no matter how many years go by. There is always that sense of loss and "what if".
Keep writing and let the paper know your pain. Though it sounds redicules, it is very theraputic.
I found one tine grammer error in the poem that kinda threw me off just a little...
"I hate you because you were a faking star
Now I can see who truly you are
And I hate myself too for opening my door
I thought you will raise me high but you threw me on the floor"
I believe that it should read " I thought you would raise me up"
Other than that it was very inspirational. It allows others to see that they are not the only one to experience this love, anger, hate, and pain all in one.
~~Sher
