I think a lot of people change their appearance or things they do to try and get noticed by people, I say just be you and everything will work out. More then a few spelling mistakes and punctuality mistakes. Capitalization was missed in a lot of spots, you want want to add commas and periods into your poems at points where you want the reader to stop. "I know you'll never love me the same as you love her the phone rings" Their has to be some kind of seperation in a topic change. I gave this an honest 4/5 nice job