Comments : All That Passes Is Time

  • 16 years ago

    by xoOrdinaryGirlox

    I bet lots of people actually have been in this postion before, not knowing what to write. Every poet goes through this.. So I think your speaking on behalf of everyone. :)

    Oh and something i spotted in the 10th line:

    'Because it don't need to rhyme'

    "Don't" sounds better as "doesn't" here.

    But apart from that.. Excellent! 5/5

    XoOrindaryGirloX

  • 15 years ago

    by East Poetry

    This is a wonderful poem, I read it like 4 times and each time I liked it more and more. You are very talented and I like your style.... remind me of how i write poems.

    Write like a story?
    Because it doesn't need to rhyme,
    No need to hurry,
    Because all that passes is time.

    *Perhaps take out both of the "because's"
    *in the above stanza, you may like it more.

    Randy East