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Normally I hate hate hate hateeeeee short line poems. But you brought this together well enough to intrigue me and make me want to read the poem. Dont ask me how or why. Actually, do. Because you have talent. (:

As Britt-O said, you are dripping with passion here. And the poem is so well apt for people to relate to that it makes it even more beautiful. Because it makes your poetry seem all that much real. There's a lot of emotion here inside of really simple words and you know.. I like that. It's inspiring, haha.

You're extremely descriptive and if I had more words to work with.. I'd give you the usual chapter long comment i give talented writers. (;

For now, 5/5

I especially love the description in the first stanza:

"You are the sweetest disaster
Melancholy eyes
Strawberry lips
Hands of fire"

The simple structure works really well and I really like the idea of knowing that you'll get hurt but not caring because it's worth it. 5/5

Em xXx