Hey,
I love the subject of this poem. It's quite unique..I haven't seen one like this before. Success is one thing we all want. But poetry takes years to master, and even then sometimes it doesn't get the exposure it deserves. I have seen so many wonderful, moving poems from ordinary people, both on this site and in life in general, that haven't got the credit they deseve. This, however, should not be a reason to stop. You write beautifully, and there's no reason to stop. Think of writing as something you do for yourself. Write as if no one will read it..from the very depths of your soul. It's only then that it will amaze people.
And if in doubt think of Emily Dic.kinson whose poetry is receited by thousands across the country. Yet, she did not get any fame while she was alive. It all came after she was dead. In fact, she hardly got anything published while she was alive..and now look at her work.
All I'm saying is I hope you never give up.

I LOVED these lines the most
"Hear my words and recite them aloud
Declare my speech to the eager waiting crowd"
^The imagery there is great. I can picture it in my mind.
Great job on this poem. Keep it up! =]
--Viola

p.s. thanks for the comment on mine. i'm glad you enjoyed it. :)