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by TamborineMan   Mar 7, 2008


The seasons' cycles draw their end,
with a hollowed echo of love's pretend.
As cold as winter's hard invite,
I fear I've lost what once seemed right.

She calls to me with friendly guise,
Perceive her truth through shifty lies.
It's not for love to be renewed,
But for her to glimpse beyond the blue.

To shaken memory I'm still bound,
In our wrongs we both drowned.
She drew from me the ease of youth
Our lives apart, I mourn her truth.

Betrayed by my lover,
Oh, what have I become?
Embrace of another,
To her, the cool breeze, I succumb.

Between his arms you reach tonight
Once more, I bruise, to feel your slight.
Fall down in shame, but do not cry
You're undeserving of my sighs.

Turn my head and walk the path
From you, I'm left, only half.
Draw this knife from its safe
In and of, I lost my faith.

I feel your eyes within my tomb.
Their touch is soft, they crave to ruin.
And their reflection urges, 'down'
Down the blade to ease the crown.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    The poem is perfectly written and the flow is really awesome..And it touched me ..
    Good job,keep it up..

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    This poem is outstanding
    i love the metaraphors here and as for the title my suggestion is "A hollowed echo of love" because these words from your poem perfectly show the emotion through the poem and the atmosphere. "An echo of love" could be a title for a happy love poem, but this pithet "hollowed" makes it sad and linked to the message of the poem and makes a reader feel the same, it's a powerful metaphor that can make a meaningful and eye-catching title
    the whole poem is moving and the chice of words is good. they ixpress a lot of what you feel and also create beautiful and touching images. also nice thing how you combine stanzas describing your feelings and stanzas about the plot of this story.
    ok overall 5/5
    great write