by BlueEyedMystery Mar 9, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
You can never be too skinny, or at least that's what you've been told. |
“Your body is to be starved and abused, made into the perfect mold.†|
by Bugg
I thought the flow was excellent. I really enjoyed reading this. My boyfriend actually suffered from bulimia for a while (I wrote a poem about it - It's Tearing Us Apart -lol-). He's much better now. This piece was well written and alot more people should read it. It's going on my faves list. |
by Gizmo
You can never be too skinny, or at least that's what you've been told. |
Not too bad, Cayce. You're right, the flow wasn't great, but when it comes from the heart, it almost doesn't matter. |
by Blissful
Oh my I loved this! You took a topic many attempt to write about but miss it's meaning and you took in to another world where I could feel everything this young girl felt. The language you used was flawless and fit everything flawlessly. I thought the flow was great except for in the third stanza where you repeated "show" twice. That made me stumble while I was reading but I quickly picked up momentum from there because everything after that was just flawless. |