Tnx lucas! :)

I think u were a bit excessive with trying to describe everything. you did a great job, but i'm not so sure that you needed all of the extra wording to make it so good. sometimes simple is better. you also misuse some of the words in your attempts to better the poems. You certainly know a lot of big words, but using them all at once makes your poems harder to understand for the audience and after a while it becomes repetitive and looses some of the finesse that i'm sure is intended. just trying to help =)

Thanks for your comment Broken Hands... I'll take a note of it..he he he, I'm quit new in writing poems, i have a long way to go... by the way, the poem was inspired by the game DIABLO, :)

And also was inpired by the poem of Lucas entitled "Fairwell Starlight Lucifer: Dialogue Between God and Devil (1) "