by StandStill
Wow. this got my heart racing. no joke... |
Wow. o.o That was just.. wow. It was scary, and erotic almost. Your use of words were AMAZING. I seriously got lost in the poem, and I didn't want it to end. So, I went back and read it a few more times, haha. I mean, usually I don't like reading long poems, but I just couldn't take my eyes away from your beautiful, terrifying words. I have nothing bad to say about this poem. There's really nothing to critize. |
by Lemma
Shivers!!! This was SO amazingly creepy I actually looked over my shoulder as I was reading it! The atmosphere it created was so intense and WOW! The rhyme was natural and, whilst you probably didn't need it, made the poem that bit more clever and made it stick in my mind even more. The imagery was terrifyingly descriptive, my favourite stanza: |
Very good poem. And very well written! The flow was great, the word choice was decent, and the concept was astonishing. But the length was unappealing. Kinda felt like I was just reading a book after awhile... lol Very good poem though, 5/5 |
Wow... |
by Kitten
Wow...i'm not sure what else to say it was absalutly amazing you have such great imagery in this poem it is stunning how good you are |
This is a masterpiece filled with imagery, passion ,and a storyline. |
by Nix
Wow! Bravo, superb poem, it posses endlessly powerful images which created so vivid picture in my mind. You combined grotesqueness and uniqueness of this piece to create this absolutely captivating atmosphere. |
by Brittany C
Haha i really liked this one. It's great i loved the words that u used and the peom flowed rather good. 5/5 |
Dang you had me sitting on the edge of my seat- it gotz me breathing kinda rapidly as well *whistles* this is a great poem for the most part there where some places i got a little lost but not bad for that. great work keep this kinda work up- |
by KJ
OMG. Freakin awesome! =) |
Wow, I'm speechless. This piece was simply amazing, perhaps, too amazing for words. The emotions in this piece were. .intense, and you worded it perfectly. Everything is in tune with itself, and everything just. fits. The flow was flawless and the whole thing was perfect, from start to finish. 5/5. |
by Jessie
It reminded me of a dumb chick cheating on an exceptionally devoted boyfriends.... I do believe you needed more rythym in the poem, but the use of words was pretty good... fairly good imagry |
by Jerusha
This gave me goosebumps all over... great great use of words... i could visualize everything! way to describe things that r hard to put out in words.... WOW... please do keep writing. |
by Brandon Lee
Wow that was kinda hot. I am not sure if I should feel ashamed by that or not. Def a good story to it. reading poems like that makes me wonder where the inspiration came from. I don't have anything bad to say about it. I hope all your future poems are like that. 5* |
by ECILA ice
A nice canvas was created and curved deeply with such powerful words.. great job in here.. you bring out a creepy ambiance though long i just can't help not to finish the whole stanzas and lines. |
by Blissful
Oh my this was just amazing! You truly took me into another place with you words and just blew me away. You choice of words was flawless in creating this dark and haunting mood. I was hooked from beginning to end. |
by Sumit Ojha
Little long but Excellent poem... Keep up this good work... :) |
Hm. |
by Ixora
This poem made me want to jump with excitment...yes i realize its a sad poem in a way but i think its more dark in a good way...idk i just really like it. I think you've just became one of my favorites. |