Everything is so beautiful except for a couple of unrhymed lines(ie. arms rhymes with bounds?) which are the only things that stop this from being one of the VERY BEST poems I have ever read(and I have read a few). Great story, fantastic idea for telling it making this an outstanding read!

Thank you so much for your praise.. the critique is very useful, and I will take it to heart!!! This poem was so hard to write, because I felt it as I wrote it, and I felt as though my emotions were getting in the way :) Funny thing about it.... it was not personal... it was all just a thought in my mind!!

Again.. I thank you and appreciate your opinions!!