If you don't remember me, just let me remind you that I'm honest and a lot harsher than most on here.

The words, the lines, the rhymes were good, as was the story, but something about it held it back, or wasn't there. Maybe it could've flowed a little more, but I'm not sure. I wish I could be clearer, but I can't. Sorry.

Brad

Nice flow and so nice work but you could do better ,rhyme was good too,keep write