I am better than this
better than you....

Luanne,

What a powerfull poem. the words quoted above are my favorite ones, I have said them a million times the last six months..
I can so relate to this..the need to hang on, but at the same time the fear that it is in vain anyway and there will be no happy ending...
Be strong, girl!
*hugs you*

5/5 Ingrid

Luanne
What a thought provoking piece. Memories and thoughts can consume us. Somedays we live only in our thoughts. Things that have happened. Things we want to happen. The wounded heart.

enough ... Enough ... ENOUGH
wipes tears
I am better than this
better than you
invisible hands hold me
wipes away suffering pain
whispering ...
do not let this consume you child
live for today, live in the moment
kisses beads
thank you
smiles ...

Yet there are invisible hands holding us and wiping our tears. This is an awesome write.
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Luanne,
Dear you have hit to the core with such a thought provoking piece of art. So many times when we are consumed by the memories that provoke us to bring it in to today, if only we can get a grip on reality and realize we will be brought through this. There have been many times in my past when I have said something living in my past. I guess the saying cry me a river, build a bridge and get over it is appropriate for those times. Remember God is always there to help you through the rough times. When it seems like the whole world has turned their backs and no-one understands......He does.
I loved this poem dearly and it has brought forth the thought to live for today because it could be yesterdays regrets or tomorrows promise.

Wow, this was pretty much amazing. I just shocked me how you could protray such emotion with so little words. It really does seem like there aren't many words, but it tells a big story. Flashbacks. Hate them. I gathered that you were have a flash back from an eating disorder, maybe? The reason I said that is because of the second stanza. Where it says:

No more food for you
Enough ...
Pulling back elastic upon wrist
Snap!
^^ It's like your body wants more food, but you won't let it have anymore, so you snap the rubber band around your wrist like a punishment or a reminder for not eating.

I really liked how it didn't rhyme. I use to be really big into rhyming. I still rhyme, but I've gotten to where I enjoy reading non-rhyming poems, because usually there is more emotion and it's more... dramatic, I guess. Wonderful job!

[I'm adding this to my favorites.]

Keep writing!
Cayce

"In times of pain and sorrow, someone is always watching over you.
Holding us close."

ooh creepy haha :P

yet another great write

love the descriptive words :)