Laying in your arm's

by Xx Grieving from the inside outxX   Mar 12, 2008


Walking in the moon light waiting to lay under the stars with you under the dark blue sky to sleep forever in your arm's and hearing your heart beating fast and slow all at the same time i wish i could stay like this forever. like a endless dream that i wish it would last forever like our love is never ending. i love the way you love my. the way you kiss my neck your touch i miss so much when your gone i miss seeing your blue eye's in-the morning light i love it when you smile at me in the morning after we weak up in your arm's again hoping that this morning never end's i love weakling up in your arm's laying under warm blanket's and the smell of Lillie's wake's us up i love our morning talks and our morning coffee. i love the way i can tell you anything that won't i love that about you. your blue eye's your touch your laugh that what make me and that's why i love you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hiya Chris,
    I agree with Marcus. I find it easier to break a group of expressions into chunks (stanzas)
    I would also add that spell checking your poem will highlight many simple spelling and gramatical errors. You will find the poem takes on a 'new look'. You will see good and bad repetition at a glance.
    Very good though and ever so romantic. A lucky guy!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marcus

    A very warming and aw... worthy poem. You have a great way with words in this poem.

    If you breck this poem into stanzas it will give off a greater sense of organization and even love for your work. Also this will boast your comments you'll get because it will be easier for the reader to read.

    Great work over all

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