by Andrew Mar 13, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Dear dad, the sweetest man i know, you helped bring us to earth and lit a candle of life, but soon you took a flight up to the heavens above, question is ' why sooner and so sudden? ' we never had enough of you and never will i promise, your flight gave us a freight but we never stopped to fight, in our hearts you are always dear even if your are never near, the bond we had is strong, sweet memories will always make it stronger, your love and care i will always miss, your gifts and treasures i will always keep, wherever you are, in my heart you are always deep. In life or at death, to me you are my number one dad. |
by Mary
This was a very nice poem and im srry about ur dad. I lost my mom when i was 6 so i could relate to your feelings :) keep it up |
I enjoyed this one great choice of words very touching. Sorry for your loss. the only problems I see here is the format and to many commas. |
Your choice of words are great, i think you need to arrange the layout of the poem better maybe in verses, just seperated a bit. |
by Abha
A touching gesture, i am moved... |