I've got to say, just reading this reminds me of Cornish...This is quite a moving piece, where the narrator openly expresses the relationship of her and her lover, and how much he means to her.

Its quite eloquent in the way you use your words, so.

Again, we need to think stanzas and punctuations, would greatly ease the rhythm of this piece.

Well done again...You're a good writer.

Wow the message you conveyed was so beautiful well done. very well done.
xx

"
Today, I've finally seen
Dreams are not meant to last.
"

Thats like heart breaking to read...
Reckon the best line in this totally awesome poem!!!!

5/5

xxxxxx

Wow that was very beautiful i loved reading it. great kob Shanik