This poem is better. The choosing of words expressed a true affection for someone, and it was nice to see. The rhymes are still missing, but apperantly this is your style. The flow was nice and the structure uneven which made it interesting. nice work 5/5

I like reading old poems sometimes to see where people have progressed from/to. Its interesting to read this and your other older works, they are quite good but you have improved in general since. Keep up the upward spiral :)
Colm