Wow a lot of anger and emotion in this one. It flows pretty good and i love the word choice. 5/5 :)

Wow.. you can definitely sense the anger in this poem.. I bet it felt great writing this poem and letting all that emotion out.. way to get it out of you..

not much to say about this poem.. it was nicely written and unfortunately people can relate to this.. which is a sad thing in this world... nice job writing it though. =)

Wow. I liked this poem, even though it was pretty violent. The anger was really strong, and it really flowed into the reader, making you really feel the poem. The poem flowed pretty good too, I think it could use a little bit of punctuation/capitalization so as to make it more pleasant to look at. But I really loved it, you wrote really strongly and fluently, good word choice.
5/5
~gabriella

Haha porr little david :D

The way you've used your words to create such imagery in this poem is awesome. I really enjoyed reading it because your word choice was so effective. And the concept was very deep. Great poem! 5/5

Wow, very wordy...
I'm an Indonesian, thanks for those new vocabularies...
Also your rhyme scheme done great, flowed well and it's excellently written...
Excellent score too, 5/5

Excellent job lot of emotion.

I like the strong passion, it makes people get into it more because your into it.

I dont love this poem, its a bit too angry and written the way maybe a book would be written,

as a writer you should try harder to let out your anger in a more poetic way, where it will read nicer but still get the point across just as strong

Very twisted, but I like twisted, so it's all good. Great poem; The line about the throat didn't make sense to me, but maybe I'm just missing something, but might be something to check out. Don't worry though, we all have that kinda stuff going through our head, trust me on that one. (5/5)

This poem was really good. Well, the concept and the way you conveyed your feelings. The grammar, and word usage was poor though. The swearing was a little unnecessary... and the grammar could have been better. Otherwise it was a nice write.