I really liked this poem, though I could sort of tell that you had been having writer's block [the flow was a little choppy and even though you seemed to have a really good idea of the begginning of the poem, it just sort of trailed off at the end]
It was still really amazingly good for someone
recovering from it.
I really loved your word choice, you're a really amazing writer.
4/5
~gabriella

Hey,
even though you have a writers block, I think you did a great job in trying to make it go away..The flow unfortuntaly is a bit rough, but I like you writing style nonetheless, keep it up and you still get a 5.5 from me
kisses stephanie

Very well written

This poem was perfect. The flow was flawless. And your vocabulary is outstanding. The way you worded it was perfect, as well. I could really feel the intensity of this piece. The ending was great and the poem as a whole was just too amazing for words. :] 5/5.

Its good to try, and i think you good poet wish you good luck , i love it 5/5

Writes block or not this is still a great poem, tho the flow was a bit off - it didnt matter much tho it was still great

xXxSLxXx

You may have writer's block but this is an amazing poem and one that probably hits home with many people! The imagery is extremely vivid which makes the reader able to place himself in this woman's situation. One can almost feel the feeling of impotence that she has, wanting to be loved but receiving exactly the opposite. Although you say it for battered women, I am sure many unhappy women can relate to the character you've created. Brillant, top marks from me.

And remember, a writer's block is psychological. When you have a talent like this, all you need is a little inspiration. :)

You done a pretty good job for someon with a writers block.
very good poem btw

I like this poem a lot! The word choice is good. And even though this poem can be taken many different ways because everyone has a different way of looking at things i like it a lot and think it is amazing. And in my opinion its not to brutal.