It was decent. In some parts your rhyming was consistant and then you changed to rhyme, no rhyme, rhyme, no rhyme, which through the rhythm off. I like some of your choices you made with words. I hate to see the same words over and over again and I found a few I enjoyed. I wasn't fond of the first stanza. I felt you were introducing your poetry when you should have been introducing the poem. I understood the story all right which is good because that means you were clear. The title was unique. Overall I'd give this more than a three but less than a four. I can't give you that unfortunately...Hmm...Now I have to think about this...Tough decision...Which one to give...A three...or a four? Well it wasn't my favorite poem...so I'll give it a three.

I loved it