Laying Here Thinking

by Brittany C   Mar 15, 2008


The breeze kisses my checks
as I lay in the soft grass.
Just thinking of the future
and of you my love.

The sun is setting now
changing the color of the sky.
Kissing the earth as it disappears
and the stars come out to shin.

I want to be with you
and to make you happy.
Never will I leave your side
unless your love for me is lost.

This much I do know
for I love you so much.
My life would mean nothing
if I were to ever lose you.

The velvet sky is black
with the illuminating moon
showing the black shapes of
the trees nears and far.

As i continue to think
of my one true love
and what life would be like
once I am legally his wife.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Dennis

    A beautiful love poem filled with heartfelt emotions and hope for the future.

    Two things I'd change...second stanza "shin" should be "shine" and the fifth stanza "nears" should be "near".

    Minor corrections to a very sweet poem...keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    This was is much better then the one I read before. It took me into another world and I felt as if I was laying next to you on the grass daydreaming about my love. Your used imagery so nicely that I could feel everything you were saying. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    I love the concept, for me it was simple and has a great message on it!

    Great write!
    Keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    I really like this poem. It flowed nicely although the grammar could use some work :P And the concept was so beautiful. (fan of love poems) I enjoyed it... 5/5

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