I really like this poem. It flowed nicely although the grammar could use some work :P And the concept was so beautiful. (fan of love poems) I enjoyed it... 5/5

Excellent!

I love the concept, for me it was simple and has a great message on it!

Great write!
Keep it up!

This was is much better then the one I read before. It took me into another world and I felt as if I was laying next to you on the grass daydreaming about my love. Your used imagery so nicely that I could feel everything you were saying. Well done *5/5*

A beautiful love poem filled with heartfelt emotions and hope for the future.

Two things I'd change...second stanza "shin" should be "shine" and the fifth stanza "nears" should be "near".

Minor corrections to a very sweet poem...keep up the good work! 5/5