Comments : Photos

  • 16 years ago

    by Tiffany

    Wow.. I love it.. its so true though.. photos do show emotion.. nd they can even tell you a story.. lol.. great work!!..

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I think that you ruined substance of this piece a little cause of rhymes, I personally don't like rhyming, and rhyming here seemed unnecessary, unoriginal and forced to me, that is just my personal opinion and I don't want to offend you at all but I dislike your rhymes.
    I think that you don't need second they in first stanza that left also negative impression on me.
    I don't like the fact that every stanza has in self word-photo- or word-picture- that also left bad impression on me.
    I think that you write nicely but you could improve your writing, I personally think that this poem would be much better with some metaphors or you could simply just expand your vocab, for my taste this poem is too simple and too clear.
    But sorry for being harsh that is my opinion, I appreciate your effort to write but I think that you have talent and that you must to use more creative ideas and more deeper thoughts, maybe to try something different from what you usually write.
    Of course if you are satisfied with your poems than who am I to tell you that I don't like them, this poem isn't bad, I read a lot of worse pieces but I think that you have that capability to write really amazing stuff but you should try to write more unique and challenging pieces. I read some of your poems and I saw that you really can express emotions on excellent way and here, I don't see any emotion.

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I love this poem, and you were very right about photos. I liked the ending the best, gives out hope and stuff. Nice work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Pink Romance

    I LOVE THIS POEM I WAS ACTUALLY THINKING OF WRIOTTING ONE LIKE THIS. LOL

    BUT WORK. =[

    I CAN SO RELATE BABE NICE YOU
    SO MADE ME LIKE SNAP BACK TO POETRY,
    SEE I LOVE POETRY ITS PEOPLES WRITTINGS THAT MOTIVATES YOU AND KEEP YOU GOING ...
    5/5

    ONE DAY YOU WILL BECOME THAT PERSON YOU ALWAYS WANT TO BECOME, YOU HAVE ECELLENT WORD CHOICE AND EMOTIONS. =]

    LATA! PLAYA! LOL.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Photos tell no lies
    Though they may fade away
    They only tell the truth
    It will always be that way

    (i like how you used photos as your main concept, very original, but also simple too)

    You may not believe them
    But let it be true
    That pictures save the world
    They show what it can do

    (nice work, i don't really like the last line, but good anways.)

    Pictures show emotion
    By helping you remember
    You will never forget
    That they'll make things better

    (beautiful)

    So when you're feeling down
    And you simply cannot cope
    Pick up your favorite photo
    It will give you hope

    (i like how this ends, it makes me want to look at a photo. great work. Shanik)