I really love the title, it's simply unique and overall it's an enjoyable read. A Bit off in some part but overall still excellent one. I give you 5/5 for this!!!

First of all, I've got to say that I really love the title. It catches the readers eye, and then the go to read the actual poem, and the first line just draws them in to where they can't escape! It's like a trap! [Sorry, I'm just a little hyper. >.>] Anyways, I just loved how you worded everything. It was almost sarcastic. I'm no exactly sure how to explain it.. but I just love your style of writing in this poem. It's kind of conversational, I guess. Ugh, I hate it when I can't find the words to say about something.

But then again, I always new the end was at the very beginning.

^^ I don't know why I love this line so very much. I think it's because it's a little contradicting, but it makes sense all at the same time. "new" needs to be "knew".

Now I'm left with empty songs and a dirty cupboard;
Just to say I'm safe and you're gone.

^^ Ooooh! I loved that ending so very much. I usually have quite a hard time with endings, but this one just tied everything together.

You did a really great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Oh my, I LOVE this. You've taken all the complication, mistakes, false hope, promises, need for understanding, and stong love you get from many relationships and put it it all together beautifully in a poem. I love the metaphors. The whole firefly in his cup is genoius. Very beautiful and descriptive. Fits very well. Everything about this poem amazes me. It's is such a great piece. The ending ties it all together and lets us know what we're left with once that relationship you grew to depend on for so long is gone. Great work. Keep it up! =]
--Viola

Very strong feelings and emotion. great poem. 5/5

"It was the view and the secrets and the lip gloss we shared,
Just to gain insight for a day."
- i'm in love with these first lines. They got my creative side going and they really made me.... think. [Not that I don't always think. lol] You truly did an amazing job beginning the poem.

"So does knowing what you do fill your songs like you said I would?
'Cause a long embrace and a hard goodbye kept me going for so long,"
- So heartbreaking, but I know that I've been able to relate to this one before. Lovely.

"But then again, I always new the end was at the very beginning."
- 'new' should be 'knew'. :)

"Laced fingertips are the nicest shade of blue this time of night,
Yet I was the one promising I'd paint them a safe shade of red."
- I love your usage of 'laced fingertips' - very creative. And the imagery and your use of color in this one was beautiful.

"Much like the colour your cheeks turned when intoxicated words flew back;"
- a phenominal comparison you created here. i like it.

"And kissed you fair on the mouth,
Just so you could dare to weave another intricate lie
In the corner of my favourite cupboard."
- see.. most people I know wouldn't understand this, they truly wouldn't. But to me it makes perfect sense. Truly beautiful.

"Now I'm left with empty songs and a dirty cupboard;
Just to say I'm safe and you're gone. "
- [BAM.] That's what your ending did to me - it was absolutely perfect. It tied up the poem nicely and made it end with a bang.

Phenominal job. Overall: 5.5
-- Steph. xx

Good way of showing ur emotions!!!!!

I've read this piece before and I really thought I had commented it. Sorry.

Now, I found this piece to be alot different from you hun. Mainly with the structure. Though I did like it and found it to be quite unique and interesting. I adore seeing different structured poems some of my favorite writers on this site create different ones and it seems as though you've mastered that sd you kept the flow smoothe and on course.

I must say I adored your word choice throughout this. Really vivid which made the images stand out in my mind. Not only did just place vivid words in here and there you actually used them throughout

sentences. "Laced fingertips are the nicest shade of blue this time of night" -Beautiful

That line truely caught my attention and kept my thoughts wondering into a place like this. A stunning line.

"Yet I was the one promising I'd paint them a safe shade of red."

Another beauty of a line you portrayed here. Definitly a gem. I liked how you were writing the piece here. Your poetry always amazes me how you can talk to someone within them. I've seen many people try and do that but they never pull it off. So well done.

"Just so you could dare to weave another intricate lie"

The emotion portrayed within this was heart wrenching yet oh so gorgeous. I can't explain how I felt in a way which will make sense but hopefully you will understand me, after all complex minds think alike. The emotion was deep and touched my heart though I found it to be beautiful as it mezmirized my thoughts completely. All I was focused on was this piece. Not the things which surround me.

You ended this pieces nicely. I found my interest to keep from start until finish and my thoughts and images just flowed from my mind afterwards. I had to take a brake before I began commenting and just sit because of the beauty you have etched into my heart.

This definitly deserves a 5/5 from me. Loved it. Keep up the great work.

~Mel