I realy love this part:We will promise to each other
that we truly love one another.
You promise that this will last forever.
good work , keep it up

I like how you try so hard to rhyme, but it doesnt work too well, you're trying to hard, just open yiur heart, release all your emotion, and don't care about rhyming too much.

I enjoyed readings, this and I felt that the concept was touching.
But like tara kay said^ it seems like your trying to hard to ryhme..and it's throwing me off a little.
I just felt like this piece was forced, when it should just flow from your heart.
Still a good read. 4,5

X Paula

Wow the love and emotion put behind this poem deserves a 1000 5/5 votes. It feels so good to be that much inlove and building all your dreams on the promise of a new love. 5/5