She Waited

Everyone else has already said everything I could have hopped to say. Great job

Going from how she lost her love...to finding a new one(:. I'm one of the heartbroken ppl who lost faith in love, but it shows that if u keep faith even when u've been hurt it will happen<3
5/5

I know this feeling all too well :] I found love a little over a month ago.. and I had these exact feelings.. and once I found love.. that smile just never left my face because I am completely happy and in love with him. This was short, I thought the emotion could have been better.. but overall it was good! :]

Very touching, sweet and warming.
I loved this piece simply for the touching concept:)
Excellent job:D

x Paula.

"that number one guy.
Always waiting for love
she had given up hope."
[THE number one guy,
always LONGING for love,
YET, GIVING up hope.]

- All the changes I made tot his stanza is to add emphases and take away words used too many times.

The last two stanzas practically say the same thing. You could possibly make ONE reallly good stanza or make the middle one a bit more of the transfer and then the last one having him. I think that it might be better as two stanzas only though. Nice, cute little poem would be nice.

"Now she has you.
Once again she smiles.
Her love for you grows
faith in you is all she knows.

The wait is over now.
She has found you
her true love and
a forever lasting one. "

Try:
[The wait is over now.
She's no longer yearns -
for you've been found,
the forever lasting one]

I KNOW that my version isn't great, not at all. But, if you did something like that to go along with the first one. I really, really, really liked that "faith in you is all she knows." Line, maybe you could switch out the first 3 lines in the second stanza and keep that one, then fix the last one up a bit to make it a 3 stanza poem? Or work that line in the last. I really think it's a go-get-it kind of line. (: