by Alex D Mar 19, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Thats it Ive done it |
by Danielle
Wonderful. almost like an uncontrollable insanity. |
Thats it I[']ve done it |
by Alex D
Actually, Donnie Darko has been my favorite movie since I was 15 lol. In regards to the end, it all depends on what theme you take away from the poem. From my feedback on other sites: some people relate it to sibling abuse at a young age, some people take it as abuse from a significant other, and some as some deep evil entity in the mind. I didn't write the poem with the intention to match any particular one of these themes. I wrote it so that my reader would be able to interpret how he/she chooses to interpret. The poem is written is written from the first person point of view, but it isn't a first person poem in reality. It's not personal, just a message and a theme I wanted to display. The laughter is most feasibly taken away as the consummation of the narrators mind but it would be in respect to whichever theme you took away. |
For one, it explained a bit more in depth than most other poems usually repeating the same theme that you seem to have here. You have unique descriptions such as, "the flicker of your tongue", "Rattling in the floorboards." and, "Strike holes in my vitals" BUt I don't know about the rest, with the ending it seemed like you were going through a Donnie Darko feel to the poem, don't know if you have ever seen that movie but at one point he laughs to himself much like the way your poem lines end. Is it that the amdness consumed the narrator of this poem? Also, you should use I at least once but not much more than that, from the first mention of the word, the audience can tell taht you are writing in first person point of view. |