by Normal is the Watchword Mar 19, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Verse 1 |
by Melpomene
Now this, These lyrics I found to be alot better then the last. I actually adore these lyrics as I felt the emotion to be much stronger and much more beautiful. You had an evanescence feel to this. Definitly what I was to see. Your chorus was amazing. Each verse came together nicely. I just really enjoyed this piece. You grabbed my attention with your amazing flow and nice vocab. |
by Melantha
This was amazing! |
by Teria
Well, I can't really comment on the flow because it's meant to be a song, and when sung it may sound better. There weren't many parts of it where I thought it was a tad bit off, but there was one or two - but when I read it aloud the second time it did sound better, so maybe sung it's just fine. |
by Moose
(Im not a fan of commenting lyrics but I will try my hardest) |
by Nikki
You did are really excellent job, this poem was written very well. Keep it up 5/5 |