by Blissful
Wow I loved the depth here. After reading the title I was compelled to read more and this poem was just amazing. The ending was perfect and the poem as whole was filled with suspense. Well done *5/5* |
by Poseur
That was very compelling. you did a great job. it surprised me at the end; i didnt expect it. you have a good flow with your poems;; nice work |
by Love vs Fate
This poem is great! you got a lot of talent. i was able to picture what was going on. easy to follow. sweet and simple. i found this poem mysterious and yet i loved it! keep it up ^_^ 10/10^_^ |
by Love vs Fate
O.O robin, i'm loving this poem. |
Sixth line, you mean belonged to. Not belong to. This is because the other words you used were past tense. |
I wish I knew who those haunting whispers belonged to, |
Wow. That was creepy. Especially the end when you find out that the voice was your mother. I can sort of relate to this, because I've heard voices whispering in my mind, but I think it was my own voice talking to me if that makes sense. It's really a great story, but I don't see how it's a poem. There really wasn't any kind of flow. |
I think i would lock the door at night and leave the light on |