This was nicely written but... A little too... Talkative... It's a very good concept. And your wording was beautiful. 4/5

Oh my ggodness, its amazing. I ADORE the line "I'd save the "Oh!"'s for oxygen,", its so cute and creative. I must say i have absolutly no idea why there are random words emphasized in the {}, i mean i could understand if they were symbollic or otherwise important, but it almost takes from the seriousness of the poem, and turns it into a joke.