I am the winter

The snow falls outside my window,
Fierce winds pelt the sides of my empty home,

*I love this line. The imagery there is flawless. One thing I would do is break down the line. The length of it really messes up your flow. I'd make it smaller. Maybe break it into two lines.*

I suddenly realize that I can relate to this ice covered abyss,

*Same thing here. I'd break these lines down*

I am the winter.

I am the twig,
Always stepped on,
Disregarded,
Forgotten as I break under pressure.

*I love this stanza. The way you describe the twig is amazing. I can imagine a twig being stepped on and no one caring about it, that's brillant. *

I am the rose,
Once blooming passionate red,

*I'd add an "a" after blooming. That way it sounds more complete. Beautiful imagery though*

Frozen by angry storms,
Tyrants to my love.

*Love that last line. Very clever :) *

I am the tree,
Still yet strong,

*I don't really understand this line, it seem kind or random. Maybe " Steady and strong" or something like that.*

My ends will break,

*I'd change this to "my braches will break" that way you relate to the tree more*

Yet, I am silent to the pain.

My smiles reviled,
Loving attitude ignored,
For whoever loved something dead,
Awakened by sun to live again.

*I like you're ending. but it doesn't seem to fit here. I'd maybe reword the ending so your idea is finished. I think you had some amazing ideas. Overall this was really good. Just work on your ending some. Nik

Courtney
What a sad and touching piece. I enjoyed reading this.

I am the tree,
Still yet strong,
My ends will break,
Yet, I am silent to the pain.

This stanza really caught my attention. Just loved it. My ends will break
Yet, I am silent to the pain. So many times when we are hurting we suffer in silence.
Great job!
Love Cindy

I am the rose,
Once blooming passionate red,
Frozen by angry storms,

I love how you take a beautiful creation as a Rose and then use a storm to cover it up in ice. In a way it's like a heart being covered in pain over the years, love it.

Courtney,

Oh, I so love these kind of poems.....the imagery is so beautiful!
Thanks for sharing!

hugs,

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