by sweet escape Mar 21, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Not doing any work, sitting here, |
by Kaila
Againg there isn't enough emotion in this piece for me. |
by khate
The emotions were excellent,..nice work,5/5 |
This was kinda hardcore. Lol... I'm not trying to joke around really, but you know... I'm silly :P What I mean by "Hardcore" is that fact that its deep, and not something you'd expect from this scenario. I never thought about my life while I was in study hall... I just kinda fell asleep. But this poem was great because it was effective and opened my eyes to a different angle of life. And that's only because you've done such a good job of writing it :) 5/5 for sure! |
As an emotional piece, this was pretty decent, your intensity rests firmly in your final line: The last poem I read by somebody I explained how they had failed to have a final line that wrapped up the poem theme, yet yours is the exact opposite and not only wrapped it up but gave a bit of an explaination of the poem as a whole than a piece of line. |
by Sherry Lynn
Your cries are heard so loudly. I wish there was a way that I could console you and let you know that one day everything will be ok. |