Study Hall

by sweet escape   Mar 21, 2008


Not doing any work, sitting here,
in study hall, trying to put on a face of cheer.
Thinking of all in my life that is wrong,
and wishing that i was gone all along.

Never having existed in this life.
Never having turned to the knife.
Never having felt joy or fear.
Never having cried a single tear.

This is what I do in study hall,
thinking about a life I wish I never had at all.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Againg there isn't enough emotion in this piece for me.

    I don't feel anything you kind of almost went there in the second stanza.

    Suggestions:
    longer writes
    more vocabulary
    bigger emotion

  • 16 years ago

    by khate

    The emotions were excellent,..nice work,5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    This was kinda hardcore. Lol... I'm not trying to joke around really, but you know... I'm silly :P What I mean by "Hardcore" is that fact that its deep, and not something you'd expect from this scenario. I never thought about my life while I was in study hall... I just kinda fell asleep. But this poem was great because it was effective and opened my eyes to a different angle of life. And that's only because you've done such a good job of writing it :) 5/5 for sure!

  • 16 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    As an emotional piece, this was pretty decent, your intensity rests firmly in your final line: The last poem I read by somebody I explained how they had failed to have a final line that wrapped up the poem theme, yet yours is the exact opposite and not only wrapped it up but gave a bit of an explaination of the poem as a whole than a piece of line.

    Now, the poem structure wise felt akward, as though reading it outloud it was off in more than once place, I wish you could have put more emotional description in and explain this life that you mention in your final line.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Your cries are heard so loudly. I wish there was a way that I could console you and let you know that one day everything will be ok.

    We often think about "what if" and focus on that aspect instead of the taunting things that seem to rob us of our own happiness.

    Once again you have done a wonderful job portraying the pains and sorrow that we all experience.

    ~~Sher

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