by Kaila Mar 21, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Please send him back from heaven, for I do miss him so, |
by Sweet lig
Ohh that was really so much begging thoughts, well it really also sad and great words of expressing ur sadness and missing this person. very well written and well express.. keep on writing all what u feel 5/5 |
This poem is sooo sad. If its true... I'm so sorry. I don't know what I would do without my father.. Your poem held a lot of emotion.. pain.. longing.. pleading.. I could feel it. Your rhyming was pretty good. There were only a few spots were it seemed slightly forced. And when you say: lye. it should be lie. But overall it was great. I think your best stanza was that last one. I literally went: wow. That last line just hit me. GREAT job |
by Cale
This is a great poem!!! WEll done. Shows that you are really hurting. Sorry that you are feeling this! |
Ok wow this poem is sad as. i am sorry that you had this happen to you and i really feel your pain. i know what it is like to lose someone that you love so dearly. i hope things look up. you just got to live your life the way you think that your dad would want you to live. |
by HiDDEN TRUTH
This was done very well! I lost my best friend awhile back and this made me cry. I write these same kind of poems. You might be able to relate to. Please read them. |