Different but daring im into it
keep writing cuz i will be reading

1. this poem is really deep.
2. i think it need a few comas if a few places.
3.it draws in the readers attention very well.
4. over all i loved the poem. so i am giving you a 5/5 because i could really care less about the comas and shi* . what matter the most to me is the feeling and meaning behind the words and your had it. GREAT JOB.

I'm not really sure how I feel about this. It kind of kept me numb, and left me confused as to what I should be feeling. Sympathy is definitely evoked from the reader for the narrator, but there's also a kind of hopelessness there, which is deeply saddening.

It made me think, however, and for that, I enjoyed it.

Very creative poem; i like your choice of words.