I Feel You Death

Oh yes :P 'you do to my nerves a literal rape' perhaps 'you give my nerves a literal rape' or something like that, this word order is different....

but all things considered, what you said is amazing....I don't usually say what I give people,

but 5/5!

This is really good! Some more gramatically/aesthetically pleasing things--'When the moon shines no more bright' maybe 'when the moon no longer shines bright' one more syllable...but sounds much better, 'While I seek for utter happiness' maybe 'While I seek utter happiness' or perhaps 'While I seek only utter happiness' and 'I stare at you with my awful glance' sounds a bit odd. Perhaps 'I stare at you with terror in my glance' or something like that.
Looking away from grammar type stuff, this is a deep poem. It makes you think, and your style reminds me of the late eighteen hundreds (in America at least) It's definitely not something light and fluffy that just gives your eye something to look at--it really makes your mind do what it's supposed to do: think.

Good job!

Wish but I am unable to escape
You do to my nerves a literal rape
But why should I get away with you
You fill me with sadder and wiser view.

these lines touched me....,
although the complete poem is beautiful, you vocab here is incredible... keep it up...

I luv it