Comments : Holding onto friendship

  • 16 years ago

    by Valiantpenguin

    This is really good. I love the writing style. and its very true. real friends are always there for us. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Nice poem. It would have been nice if it was a little longer though. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    I must say this is an amazing poem, I loved the meaning to it. And, in a way it's kind of a sad poem but at the same time it shows how much you appreciate friends and so on. You did a great job.

    There were a few things :
    Friends love you through the good times
    And struggle through the bad

    ^^ With those lines, I think maybe you could take out the word " and " then replace it with 'you'?

    But in the end we love each other
    More than we've ever had

    ^^ I don't like " had " even though it rhymes and so on, I think there's probably other larger words than " had " . Sometimes bad is a good word to rhyme with, but had isn't. And, 'we've' well it doesn't sound that good, maybe putting " we have" instead, to make it more dictated.

    Love grows as time goes on
    For each other, one and all
    For we always have someone
    To catch us if we fall

    ^^ That's okay, not my favorite lines but no real problems with it, either.

    If we struggle through a problem
    Friends are always there
    To help you find the answer
    You love them more then air

    ^^ That is so true, and I love those lines so much.

    For our world would be so empty
    Some say it might even end
    If somewhere on this Earth
    Someone did not have a friend

    ^^ two words; AMAZING ENDING.

    - - -
    So, overall maybe try larger rhyming words in some spots (all and whatever it rhymed with as well as bad/had).

    That's it, lol. Amazing job. (:
    I absolutely loved this poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by Em

    Such a wonderful, truthful piece.
    I loved the ending.
    'For our world would be so empty
    Some say it might even end
    If somewhere on this Earth
    Someone did not have a friend'
    WOW! 5/5. Em xx