Oh my...what a cynical outlook on love from someone so young! The really sad part is that I can relate to it all too well. Part of me still believes in the happily ever after...because I have seen it with my parents. Myself on the other hand...well...let's just say I have no trouble writing sad love poems either.

Oh...the last line should read "they're lies" instead of "there lies". Yes I'm a nit picker when it comes to those things...but you still get a 5/5 :)

Like wow 5/5! your really into the zone of writing lol.
certainly not the best poem i ve read so far, but i can see that u spent alot of time and effort on this. guess hard work does pay off lol:P

keep up the good work,.

Nice work i love it jojo and i think the flow is off sometimes but the feeling inside you i can see through every words here i write also about love you can have a look,5/5

I really liked this poem as well. Your rhyming doesn't disrupt the flow of the poem at all. I think it moved wonderfully. I really like your style. The only lines I didn't get were the last two, which are supposed to be the big finally. I think switching the wording from, "To just find out they're lies" to "So you'll just find out they're lies" would make more sense gramatically. Other than that, fabulous poem.

This poem is simply adorably cute and I would not change a thing
I'm just not sure the ' is needed in fantasies

Wow you were absolutely right when you said this was a good one. Well not absolutely right just a teeny bit wrong lol b/c it's amazing. I'm going to bed with a smile on my face b/c this was an written wonderfully and tells us all we need to know. Trith sometimes hurts but heck this piece was wonderful so it doesn't hurt to much lol :) 5/5 Em x