Read My lips

by Mezmeryz   Mar 21, 2008


I'm falling forever in this hole I dug myself
I should have known it would end this way
I don't know why I'm screaming for help
Because nothing can save me from this day

Ouch! That was painful; I can now feel the bruise
Harsh landing; I'm surprised I'm still conscious.
Or am I? I can't be sure if it's a dream or not,
Where am I? This place is obnoxious.

I chose my own path and now I'm alone,
Where did these cuts and grazes come from?
I hurt them all and my heart turned to stone,
It's so dark here, and my heads feeling numb.

I'm sorry dear friends; I need you now.
It's so dark and I can't see much about,
I'm drowning here, I really can't breath,
Is someone there? Please let me out!

He's left me and I'm all alone now; so lonely,
I'm so cold I can't feel the tears on my face.
I feel so dizzy as I grip some dirt on the floor,
What is it that makes me feel such a disgrace?

Time seems to have stopped, everything's still.
But the darkness seems moving and alive.
Now I see his face, so distant but close,
I hear his words as sharp as a knife.

It hits me square in the chest; the pain,
The hurt, tears roll, the blood seems to pour.
Seeping through, gagging me, drowning me,
Read my lips: 'I love you'; my head hits the floor.

*please rate or comment on the poem, it will be greatly appreciated and i will comment and rate back all round. Thank- you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by My Mistakes

    I didn't expect your poem to end that way...the end caught my by surprise. None the less I thuroughly enjoyed your poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by xoOrdinaryGirlox

    You got one amazing imagination there :) I loved it, it's so deep and we can really feel it. I felt the ryhming to me sounded forced a little tiny bit.. But other than that.. Execellent poem my dear. Fantastic

    XoOrdinaryGirloX

  • 16 years ago

    by noha

    Beautiful, full of feeling and pain,tears as you write and its so clear , flow is good and i love how you start by falling,but we dont know the end , i like it and you got wide imagination, well done 5/ 5

  • I really liked it. and i love you imagery. but i felt that the flow was a little off kinda like you were trying to hard to make it say what you wanted instead of what you felt. Poems should be made they should just be. Like they exist in your heart and all you are doing is writing them down. But over all it was really good. Just next time take a deep breath and let the poem come from your heart.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    This piece was absolutely perfect. It's flawless. The flow was flawless and your descriptions and imagery were outstanding. The poem was very well written and very well thought out. You definitely put your heart into this poem and it really shows. Perfectly written, amazingly done. 5/5.