Comments : Life

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow, your words are powerful and put together nicely. This is so true, that life seems so easy when you are young but it gets harder along the way. Thanks for sharing, take care!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    As you approach adult hood
    Life seems so unbearable
    Yet when you see a child
    Playing in the park
    Life seems so amazing
    ^^^
    I love this part ... especially where you've added the "yet" ...
    Life does seem to get harder as we get older. The carefree feelings of youth are gone ... replaced with working .... bills and more bills ...
    But seeing that child smiling and playing in the park ... so carefree makes us realize yes .... life is pretty darn amazing. Precious!

    From the ups to the downs
    From struggles to achievements
    Everything makes you better
    Life is full of amazing events
    Life it self is an adventure
    ^^^
    Life is certainly an adventure. You start out as a baby, and life is pretty simple. As a youth it has it's up and downs preparing us for the big world outside of our circle of friends and family. Then comes adulthood where we struggle at times but our achievements are like (a treasure search adventure) when we struggle to find what we are looking for in life and finally accomplish it ... it's just like finding that gold on our treasure hunt.

    I really liked this piece ... sorry I got carried away with my babbling but I feel you have a really good message within these lines. And the title matched the poem perfectly.
    Great read Aaron!
    Luanne