The Lone Tale

The start of the poem really looked promising, and I was eager to read more. I really liked how you started the poem, very well done on the opening. It was originalish, which I always like.

This how it is
and that's how it has to be.

This flow is way off. You are up and down almost like it was a piece of sheet music.

The subject was good, it was just some of the application that came out wrong. I think that you just need a little guidence and you could make amazing poetry.

The flow was up and down, just watch that and you will be able to do a lot more than you ever imagined.

I don't mean to sound mean, just an idea on how to improve your poetry. I hope it wasn't to harsh.

4/5

I loved the way you set this poem up. Very unique !

Gasttlee
This is such a very sad piece you have written. It brought tears to my eyes. No one should ever have to feel this alone. You have captured such emotions in your words.
Good Job!
Take Care
Cindy

I loved the way you could write down you feelings´, it show that like aint always sunshine and flowers. Anyway Great work, really desserves a 5

Oh..very provoking. It tells a true meaning of life, the first stanza was so true, many out there can relate. Good job [5.5]

Best wishes,

Sarah