Wow this was really horrible. I mean sad wise. I thought it was an okay write. I think it's be better with more discriptors and a little more rhythm. But otherwise nice job
5/5

It didnt really draw my attention too much but once i gave it a shot i actually liked it.

Very excellent write here. I love how through the whole poem you kept describing the situation without stating the meaning. You never had to directly put the meaning, and it was the most heard part of the poem. Very impressive write. 5/5