That was really really good. i love every bit of the piece. there was definitely a dark feeling. you are an amazing poet! 5/5

I felt like the beginning was slightly weak, but the second stanza just blew me away.

A darkness that's so consuming it asphyxiates
an audience with such tension that you can't wait
You can't stop, you can't prevent the fall
from stage-floor to hell, as if it's down the hall
`"From stage-floor to hell" I think that's absolutely brilliant. Rhyming wait with asphyxiate kind of broke the flow just slightly though. Still, a beautiful stanza.

Dancing on devil strings, Satan's marionette
`Beautiful image. I could just imagine it. The word choice was excellent.

I felt that the line you ended with though, was slightly too long. Work on your syllabication a bit--other than that though, I think it was a well written piece . Some gorgeous images.

--..MiNDYY

Wow! Very strong and vivid. You could feel the words and passion in it. 5/5 I loved it.

Excellent, the second stanza was my favourite
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Great job

Wow! a fantastic poem. short and sweet. i loved it. you choose your words so wisely. your a wonderful writer, keep up the nice work. 5/5.