Hills

by Kim   Mar 23, 2008


Hills
As far as the eye can see
That is what my life is like

I go up
And I go down
And then I go up again

There is a problem
I solve it
And then another problem emerges

Happiness comes
Happiness goes
And happiness always returns

But when I'm down
I need to climb again
To get on top of yet another hill

Hills
As far as the eye can see
That is what my life is like

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kimberley

    I really like how you compared your life to hills. it was different and interesting in a really good way. its a different way to look at life and i like that alot. overall a sucsess with a really nice meaning. bravo. 6/5 ~KM~

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    I like this poem I can relate to it

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Edit:
    I could find nothing to correct so that's VERY good! :)

    Good comments:
    I enjoyed it. It was simple and understandable. You had no spelling, punctuation, grammar or capitalization errors. The topic was sweet and simple. You kept my attention and the consistency was great throughout the poem.

    Work on comments:
    Really, I didn't see anything you could work on. If you'd like you could experiment with punctuation marks but that's your own thing. That's the great thing about poetry. You can break the rules and make your own up along the way.

    Rating:
    I give this a five. It was a good poem with no errors and the consistency was nice.

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